Red Ring description change.

Ade

Ade

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Original description:

"Red ring. It looks like there are a total of seven colors."

First of all, the original description has two grammatical errors. (1) Sega did not capitalize "Ring." (2) The second sentence should read, "There IS a total of seven colors." Secondly, there are now more than seven colors thanks to the existence of Anti-Dark Ring and Anti-Light Ring. (Yes, I realize that Black and White Rings already exist, but these are more intense versions of the colors- ADR is more "obsidian" and ALR is more "mother of pearl.") Finally, Sega's description is very anti-climactic given the finality of this item. It just blows. I absolutely cannot stand how they wasted such an opportunity.

My suggested revamp:

"Obtained by freeing the soul of Red Ring Rico, this ring is unmatched in power. Only seasoned adventurers may use it."

Simple but powerful, in my opinion.

I totally don't care if you guys use this. I just think it would be cool. Thanks for reading.

Edit: Made a few edits to shorten / improve. (Unlike Sega.)
 
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The Japanese description by SEGA, for reference:

赤のリング。果たして「彼女」のものだろうか…
A red ring. Could it be "hers"...?
 
If anything I'd rather go for the Japanese description rather than a made-up one, mostly just to keep truer to the originals.
 
Matt said:
If anything I'd rather go for the Japanese description rather than a made-up one, mostly just to keep truer to the originals.
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There's nothing "made up" about mine other than Sega didn't write it. It doesn't take any liberties with lore =/

However, Sega's JP description is somewhat poetic. I do like it. I guess I'd be happy either way.
 
So pedantic. :P You know exactly what I mean.
 
Matt said:
So pedantic. :P You know exactly what I mean.
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Well, yeah. But I'd venture to bet I'm a better writer than Sega's English writers. I did the writing for the new MUs (NOT the typos...those were Yata's fault because I guess you can't copy / paste into Qedit). I just like doing that kind of stuff.

It's nice to leave a mark or two on the game you love ;-;

Anyway, this isn't a huge deal. There's just a few things Sega could have done to make the game's lore more fulfilling and satisfying. I hope I get more chances to improve those things.
 
For what it's worth, I don't think that lowercase "ring" is a title case error, as while the shield is "Red Ring" the description is just saying that it's a ring that happens to be red.

I'd like it if RR was a little more flavorful in the same sense that the other rings are, such as Blue Ring mentioning it increases MST. Just something like "Red ring. Increases all stats." would be better than nothing.
 
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